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Road to Riches / Road to Ruin?

Wednesday, 26 February 2014 13:03:11

Wednesday, 26 February 2014 13:03:11

Road to Riches / Road to Ruin?

On the Road to Riches
Live the Dream
It’s the Deal or No Deal
Category C Dream Machine!

Unauthorised access
Unauthorised excess
Theft or vandalism
If you don't meet with success
Will result in / Prosecution!

Deal or No Deal
Hold Hold HOLD
Add more cash
Be bold BOLD BOLD

Unauthorised overdrafts
 Unauthorised requests
Thinking you can beat the system
And building up those debts
Building up
Those debts
Will result in ... Destitution!



Road to Ruin

Saturday, 22 February 2014 12:26:44

Saturday, 22 February 2014 12:26:44

So...

Unauthorised overdrafts
 Unauthorised requests
Thinking you can beat the system
And building up those debts
Building up
Those debts
Will result in ... Destitution!

It needs to be siad or chanted.  On the page doesn't quite work.

 



Road to Riches, Road to Ruin

Wednesday, 19 February 2014 17:19:07

Wednesday, 19 February 2014 17:19:07

So I think my last line will be

Will result in Destitution!

And the first lines something like:

Unauthorised overdrafts
Unauthorised ........

I won't worry too much about a rhyme but similar sounds would be good

 

 

 

On the Road to Riches
Live the Dream
It’s the Deal or No Deal
Category C Dream Machine!

Unauthorised access
Unauthorised excess
Theft or vandalism
If you don't meet with success
Will result in / Prosecution!

Deal or No Deal
Hold Hold HOLD
Add more cash
Be bold BOLD BOLD

 

 

 



Road to Riches

Monday, 17 February 2014 18:07:10

Monday, 17 February 2014 18:07:10

We're quite a long way from the jottings that began with the Table with a wobble but that's how things go quite often.

Latest additons are in brackets. In my desire for balance, I now feel I want a fourth verse that will balance the second one.  And that needs thinking about.

(On the) Road to Riches
Live the Dream
It’s the Deal or No Deal
Category C Dream Machine!

Unauthorised access
(Unauthorised excess)
Theft or vandalism
(If you don't meet with success)
Will result in / Prosecution!

Deal or No Deal
Hold Hold HOLD
(Add more cash
Be bold BOLD BOLD)



...yes...it seems to be working again. Hurrah!

Wednesday, 12 February 2014 17:12:11

Wednesday, 12 February 2014 17:12:11

Moving some lines around, and some words too –

 

Road to Riches

Live the Dream

It’s the Deal or No Deal

Category C Dream Machine

 

Unauthorised access

Theft or vandalism

Will result in

Prosecution!

 

Shot / super shot /

Transfer / hold

Hold Hold HOLD

Collect!

Money money money

Bonus!

 

Unauthorised prosecution

Will result in vandalism

Theft or access

Deal or no deal

HOLD HOLD HOLD



Sorry - blog isn't working!

Thursday, 6 February 2014 16:58:33

Thursday, 6 February 2014 16:58:33


Deal or no deal?

Monday, 3 February 2014 16:59:25

Monday, 3 February 2014 16:59:25

For the moment, I'm interested in the flashing machine with all its messages...

Deal or no deal
Road to Riches
Live the Dream
It’s the Deal or No Deal
Category C Dream Machine
Unauthorised access theft or vandalism will result in prosecution
Shot / super shot / Transfer / hold
Hold Hold HOLD Collect!
Money money bonus
Next to a meal deal
24hr ccTV
Under 25?
deal or no deal

I think this is almost rap-like as it stands.   (Is someone who raps a 'raptor'?)



Station jottings

Thursday, 30 January 2014 14:53:53

Thursday, 30 January 2014 14:53:53

This is the way many poems start - with a page of jottings. Here I am (there I was) sitting in the cafe on a train station...

A table with a wobble
A deal or no deal machine (fruit? no, gambling ...does it have a name?)
Category C sceptre machine secure
Road to Riches
Live the Dream
Shot  super shot  Transfer  hold hold
Collect
Money money bonus
Next to a meal deal
24hr ccTV
Unauthorised access theft or vandalism will result in prosecution
Under 25?
I don’t have whisky except premixed with coke but I do have carling Marlboro or anadin
And an ad for soup ‘just made’ which I doubt
Caution wet floor stands on a dry floor
It’s easy to be critical
When unwanted music beats above your head
And win win lights flash to your left
And there’s a hum of machines
Cooling, warning, killing bugs and most likely monitoring me
But it’s warm
The other customers are quiet
Or chatting amicably
There’s a real coffee machine and no curling sandwiches
The guy behind the counter pleasant enough
Space to park myself take off my hat and coat for a while
A glass – well a plastic goblet – intrepid fox wine to go – by my hand
And time to look around

I’m not Edward Thomas observing the lie of the land
But on this drear night not sure I’d want to be



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