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A lie, a reminder, a promise, an excuse...

Tuesday, 8 September 2015 15:35:54

Tuesday, 8 September 2015 15:35:54

Having returned to this after a long break, I'm quite pleased with it. I think it's the kind of thing that students could have a go at.

A lie
set free
like a fly
where will it settle 
where will it go 
will it mate
and reproduce
produce maggots
of untruth?

A promise made
Emerging like a butterfly
From its coccoon
Tests it wings
Takes flight
Settles... moves on...
Can it be trusted?

A reminder...
A buzzing fly
banging at the window pane
of your mind
flies off around the room
out of sight, out of mind
And returns
bangs against the pane again

An excuse..
Wriggling
Avoiding the light
A worm
Wanting the haven of deep dark soil
Away from the pecking beaks
Of close questioning



Lies and so on

Monday, 20 July 2015 15:34:15

Monday, 20 July 2015 15:34:15

An excuse..

Wriggling

Avoiding the light

A worm

Wanting the haven of deep dark soil

Away from the pecking beaks

Of close questioning

 



Lies etc

Thursday, 16 July 2015 10:59:37

Thursday, 16 July 2015 10:59:37

Testing the blog system...

...joy - it works!

Service now resumed. Now, where was I....?



A Lie, a promise, a reminder

Thursday, 11 June 2015 16:59:59

Thursday, 11 June 2015 16:59:59

A reminder...
A buzzing fly
banging at the window pane
of your mind
flies off around the room
out of sight, out of mind
And returns
bangs against the pane again

Somehow, this searching for the right creature, the right action seems satisfying. Not just looking for a metphor for the sake of it - which can happen...  But a necessary comparison which makes the subject real.  Having discovered the fly as the image it works for me, spot on.  However, there are tweaks to be made.  Is the 'out of mind' necessary?  And I want a different word for 'bangs'.



A Lie

Wednesday, 3 June 2015 11:08:43

Wednesday, 3 June 2015 11:08:43

I hope half term was good. Here we are again, thinking about words...   And if we can make a lie into something alive, what would a promise be?

A promise made
Emerging like a butterfly
From its coccoon
Tests it wings
Takes flight
Settles... moves on...
Can it be trusted?

This is very much an experiment.  A butterfly is a flighty thing - seen as unreliable perhaps?  What would a firm commitment be like?  I want to avoid something as obvious as a dog.  

 



A Lie

Thursday, 21 May 2015 11:55:07

Thursday, 21 May 2015 11:55:07

Listening to something - I can't even recall what it was now - I had a thought about words as living things. I let my thoughts wander...

A lie
set free
like a fly
where will it settle 
where will it go 
will it mate
and reproduce
produce maggots
of untruth?

I must admit I liked 'maggots of untruth' when it occurred to me.  But does this have legs? (or wings?)  Is there any more to be said or is this it?  So many poems (and other writings) seem to go on past their Made Your Point Date. 



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