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New year, new resolutions

Friday, 3 February 2017 13:09:43

Friday, 3 February 2017 13:09:43

 

So here it is all neatly put together. Plenty of opportunities for extra verses, should anyone wish to use it with pupils.

 

Sugar Baby (after Pam Ayres)

 

I’ve given up sugar in me coffee

And sugar in me tea

But there’s sugar in all sorts of things

That came as news to me.

 

There’s sugar in me ketchup

Sugar in me beans

Sugar in me muesli

Is there sugar in me greens?

 

There’s sugar in the fruit I eat

Yes there’s sugar in a pear

And if you bite into an apricot

You’ll find there’s sugar there!

 

There’s sugar in me healthy smoothie

Probably sugar in me bread

With so much sugar all around me

It’s a wonder I’m not dead!



New year, new resolutions

Thursday, 2 February 2017 16:56:37

Thursday, 2 February 2017 16:56:37

There’s sugar in me healthy smoothie
Probably sugar in me bread
With so much sugar all around me
It’s a wonder I’m not dead!

A final check tomorrow.  See how it sounds when read out loud.

 

 



New year, new resolutions

Tuesday, 31 January 2017 16:15:00

Tuesday, 31 January 2017 16:15:00

So....

There’s sugar in the fruit I eat
Yes there’s sugar in a pear
And if you bite into an apricot
You’ll find there’s sugar there!

A final verse - this genre requires a snappy ending.  How about -

With sugar all around me
It’s a wonder I’m not dead!

And a rhyme with dead shouldn't be too hard!   



Thursday, 26 January 2017 10:04:54

Thursday, 26 January 2017 10:04:54

...which will make a simple verse with a simple rhyme: 

There’s sugar in the fruit I eat / there’s sugar in a pear / and if you eat a something / you find there’s sugar there

There’s sugar in the fruit I eat

Extra syllable in the next line would help the rhythm I think, either 'And' or 'Yes':

Yes there’s sugar in a pear

a three syllable fruit would work best. Pineapple? No. Not something you bite into. An apricot...

And if you bite into an apricot

'You'll' is better than 'You':

You’ll find there’s sugar there!

 



New year, new resolutions

Sunday, 22 January 2017 17:36:34

Sunday, 22 January 2017 17:36:34

In fact, in the style of Pam Ayres, I think it should be the distinctly ungrammatical 'me'

There’s sugar in me ketchup

And sugar in me beans
There's sugar in me muesli
Is there sugar in me greens?

There's sugar - fructose - in my five a day, even!  Help. Sugar in apples and pears and oranges and - surely not? - lemons?  Topic for the next verse, though.



New year, new resolutions

Thursday, 19 January 2017 15:30:14

Thursday, 19 January 2017 15:30:14

Should it be 'my' or 'the'? 

There’s sugar in my ketchup and sugar in my beans
There's sugar in the muesli
Is there sugar in my greens?



New year, new resolutions

Monday, 16 January 2017 13:53:45

Monday, 16 January 2017 13:53:45

This will be a simple verse, rather in the style of Pam Ayres, in which case, it needs to roll along rhythmically and be easy to perform. 

I’ve given up sugar in my coffee and sugar in my tea…

But there’s sugar in all sorts of things that came as news to me

is a good start.  Then a bit of a list of things which - sometimes surprisingly - contain sugar.  I've done some research...

There’s sugar in ketchup, baked beans, soups, breakfast cereals and even healthy breakfast biscuits!  



New year, new resolutions

Tuesday, 10 January 2017 14:11:40

Tuesday, 10 January 2017 14:11:40

January brings the good intention

That in March, won't be mentioned

 

Just a thought.  But now I'm thinking about the advice recently revised and reissued about sugar, which we know causes more harm than fat.  But is it a topic for a poem?  (What isn't?)

A straight little couplet came immediately to mind:

I’ve given up sugar in my coffee and sugar in my tea…

But there’s sugar in all sorts of things that came as news to me

Perhaps I'll gather further ideas as I consider where the sugar lies in wait...muesli, baked beans, sauce, fruit! 



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