The Poetry Place

Landscape Painting

Wednesday, 30 September 2015 20:00:48

I'm not happy with line 3. 

The surface is gently brushed  
the nap raised
just perceptibly sensitive to the touch 
a 1000  dots and dashes
never joined
never torn along the perforations
and communicating no message
we need to understand.
Now the yellow pedaloes
have returned to base
the shouts of children replaced 
by the clink of tent poles
and the sound of mallet on peg.

In line 3 want to get that feeling of tactility but very light. Sometimes you try very hard and just cannot find the word or image which does it. For the meantime I'll leave it.

There's also, from my notes, 'The cry of the waterfowl – species unknown – and
a quiet squadron of ducks interrogating the weeds.'


Please leave a comment:

Please note that posts will only go live following approval from the blog moderator.

Return to blog


Archived blogs

   [OPEN/CLOSE]  How to...

   [OPEN/CLOSE]  Sonnets

   [OPEN/CLOSE]  Topics and themes

   [OPEN/CLOSE]  Parodies and homages

   [OPEN/CLOSE]  Different types of poem


  • Poetry Archive

  • The Poetry Zone

  • Poetry by Heart

  • Forward Poetry

  • British Library

  • Poetryclass

  • The Poetry Society

  • Foyle Young Poets of the Year Award

  • Tower Poetry

  • We use cookies to deliver functionality and provide you with a better service. By continuing to browse our site you are agreeing to our use of cookies. Find out more.

    Don't show this message again.