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Offa's Land

Tuesday, 21 February 2017 11:39:39

Developing the metaphor...

I want to use hedgerow in line 3 to make the idea of stitched seams clearer so I will delete it from line 2 and substitute ‘hillside’ which works better anyway.

Offa’s land, the landscape of the Marches

Is rich in hillside, field and tree

The panorama stitched together hurriedly

By lines of hedgerows and the odd patch

Of …………… and hemmed in by ditch and lane

 

(Line 2 is two beats short; ‘panorama’ and ‘hurriedly’ are place-savers for the moment.) 



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