The next six lines, the sestet, will counter the negativity of the farm buildings by making the spectator notice the line of trees on the hillside just beyond.
But beyond, there on the hillside just above,
A stand of leafless trees (makes good) rescues the scene.
Leafless but by no means lifeless. Though green
Shoots are some way off, there’s love
I’m taking a risk with lines 2-3. I think it works but I wonder if others will.
I’m working through a number of verbs to follow ‘life’. Pulsing, waiting, growing….