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Poems about Punctuation

Tuesday, 1 April 2008 12:49:25

'I cannot stop' would be better at the end, surely?  Also the 'like' in line 5 sounds as if it's a bit of, like, conversation...    And how long should my list be?

I pause, I falter, I hesitate
I can though, like this, interrrupt
Quite politely and like this,
End lines of poetry
And enjoy, best of all, to help
With lists like shopping, birthday, things to do,

I think I'll change the second line to something stronger: 'But I can, like this...'    Should I avoid the two uses of 'like this' ?  I could change the second one to 'as here' but I'm not sure it's as clear.



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