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Monday, 10 November 2008 15:09:09

Where Desperados are drunk
The customers are sober;
Where a stack of logs is untouched by fire
The red candles flicker.

Where hatless waitresses wear red and black
The sombreros stay fixed to the walls
Where loud piped music blares
Guitars remain unstrummed

Red and red. Change red candles to crimson.  More changes needed to next 2 lines.

Above hatless waitresses in red and black
Sombreros stay nailed to the walls

Loud and blares mean practically the same. Where piped music - what??

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