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Tuesday, 18 November 2008 11:36:56

Changed line 4.  Now wonder about line 3... Would 'A stack of logs unsinged / Where crimson candles light the tables' be better?

Where Desperados are drunk
The customers are sober;
Where a stack of logs is untouched by fire
Crimson candles light the tables.
Above hatless waitresses in red and black
Sombreros stay nailed to the walls;
Where loud piped music sounds
Guitars remain unstrummed.
Outside is cold wet November
Inside is moist warm Mexico.

Also, it sounds a bit negative about the place and that's not right. Something else needs to change.



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